I can tell you now the human body is useless. Useless because I am a very gifted and talented footballer and what lets me down is my body if any part of my body gets injured or damaged it will affect me and my carer so that’s why I always keep thinking about it at the top of my mind. I am still doing GCSE so I have to be aware of my carer at football at the same time so I have to have a plan b because if I get injured and its a long term injury then I will have to go with my plan b which is coaching football because my passion is football. To be a football coach I need to have qualifications including English, maths, science and PE GCSE so it is hard for me to focus on all of these things also its a very important year for young footballers like me that are trying to get a scholarship with a professional club.
Imagen then how I was told by the physiotherapist about a small tear at my knee I was very glad to hear it was a short term injury because I could still carry on with my carer. So if I had a long term injury e.g. broken leg I will not be able to carry on with my carer so that’s why I have to study hard and get good grades. This is just a warning to me because something worse can happen. At the moment I feel very sad because I haven’t played football for almost 2 months and when I go every Sunday to watch my team play football my manager and the parents always says ” We are missing you Hamza and we cant wait until your fit again” This really got to me it meant to me that they are always caring and supportive with me because I am very important to them. Since I was injured they lost twice and won 4 times this shows how I am very important to them because we always win when I am playing. This Sunday they really have an important cup match against a very good team when the manager sent the text last night it said ‘this next cup game is the biggest match of our season’ so I have to really support them this Sunday and I will be the happiest teenager in the world if they win without me. I can tell you now the human body is useless. so you don’t always have rely on your body because your body is like a machine it can brake down at any moment.
Write about what the limitations of the human body have taught you
April 22, 2015 at 1:14 am
Your sentences in this piece are too long. I suggest that you break them up as this will make your writing more precise and acute.
Can you communicate that you’re a good footballer without stating it outright? It comes across as a little arrogant – which I know you wouldn’t want.
Try adding to this a description of a time when you were injured – how did it feel, what happened (maybe describe it in the same kind of detail as a slow-motion replay). Currently it reads well, but is a bit much of a rant.
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